tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2745091992412503077.post8624125575558368445..comments2023-04-13T02:24:33.688-04:00Comments on Unsettled: Show Me The Voice BlogfestReginahttp://www.blogger.com/profile/03493618594406138554noreply@blogger.comBlogger9125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2745091992412503077.post-12234097943253654842011-03-29T18:20:31.213-04:002011-03-29T18:20:31.213-04:00That is such an exciting segment! I particularly l...That is such an exciting segment! I particularly liked the first couple paragraphs and the way you described the pace and the need to breath. Very well done!ali crosshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13023009704454279645noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2745091992412503077.post-81725228122350572452011-03-26T19:31:20.739-04:002011-03-26T19:31:20.739-04:00Is this from a manuscript you're working on?
...Is this from a manuscript you're working on?<br /><br />Some nice imagery.Cheryl B. Dalehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/04278782212826383478noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2745091992412503077.post-80254013629340886702011-03-26T13:52:50.606-04:002011-03-26T13:52:50.606-04:00That's it? =(. I would definitely read more....That's it? =(. I would definitely read more. The tension is great, very tangible. Such a tease, =). <br /><br />Katie S. TaylorAnonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2745091992412503077.post-46715505031546079372011-03-26T09:33:50.068-04:002011-03-26T09:33:50.068-04:00Nicely done, Regina!
Have a great weekend.Nicely done, Regina!<br /><br />Have a great weekend.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2745091992412503077.post-40781417608813194592011-03-24T00:49:19.384-04:002011-03-24T00:49:19.384-04:00Definitely a scary scene. And we can feel the MCs ...Definitely a scary scene. And we can feel the MCs fear coming through. One suggestion, in one paragraph the words 'frightened' and 'terrified' both appear but I'm not sure that either is necessary because you've already done a good job of showing the characters fear and terror.Sari Webbhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/14157780034728554529noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2745091992412503077.post-31457298666540079692011-03-22T10:50:06.969-04:002011-03-22T10:50:06.969-04:00Regina,
You've set the scene very well and I ...Regina,<br /><br />You've set the scene very well and I sympathize with the character who's running from something.<br /><br />My only nit-pick would be the use of the word "chattered" in the last sentence. I just don't picture a mind doing that while scared?<br /><br />Christi CorbettAnonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2745091992412503077.post-15069366069844550492011-03-22T10:10:54.568-04:002011-03-22T10:10:54.568-04:00Ooohhh. . .very nicely done!
P.S. Pop by my blog ...Ooohhh. . .very nicely done!<br /><br />P.S. Pop by my blog when you've got a chance. I've got a gift waiting for you there.Coreene Callahanhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/15812176162873554070noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2745091992412503077.post-88680302693546992642011-03-22T09:45:07.892-04:002011-03-22T09:45:07.892-04:00Ooohhh....very nicely done!
Pop by my blog when y...Ooohhh....very nicely done!<br /><br />Pop by my blog when you get a chance....I've got a gift waiting for you.Coreene Callahanhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/15812176162873554070noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2745091992412503077.post-7969845534235447952011-03-22T06:31:06.301-04:002011-03-22T06:31:06.301-04:00ooo....ooo....shellyhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09596621767297173021noreply@blogger.com